One of the few stories here I auctally like. (Not that I hate everyone elses I mean.) It's the fact that I want to follow this story..Its really good to say the least. The journal type format in the begining was okay, feels like it needs a bit of change. Here is a suggestion, do it, don't do it, what ever you feel like. Try and dump the journal type of format and have an opening of her talking about the rain. Maybe have her mention some of her friends. Say she was going to a party that night or something so she would argue more with them. But that is just me, and I thought they needed chain guns in the lord of the rings series.
I'll be watching this story.

Former First Man of China, (kinda like first lady...cuz in China, my former wife was elected president!)
R.C. Polk