you should've carried on with this story!
it was great :]

Oh this is good. Wish you'd carry it on. :)

wow, great beginning so far, write more, keep up the good work!!

Great work! I love your writing style.

You are off to a good start and its my sincerest hope that you will finish as strongly as you started.

Please keep it up as all who have read this must be dying of waiting for the next chapter, me included.

omg, this is so good...why havent you updated? you have such awesome stories, but none of them are done! *sniffles* you are an awesome writer...

"try it" , he dared... seems we are going to have little mischief in this one ...keep up the good work

VERY anxious to read the next chapter! ;)

Ooh...devious. i like it.

tsk tsk tsk shame on him. I like how you start with present and go back to past, it's a cool twist

i really like where this story is going. i think you should kind of stay away from the unneeded repetiveness like from the end of the first chapter and the beginning of the second (about his fiancee). some parts are a little clichéd and overused, but besides, good word usage and character development. madison seems very delicious ;) can't wait for an update!

I LOVE this story please don't leave me hanging more I need More.

Hey... excellent, EXCELLENT story. Do you have Ch. 3, if you do, send it to me! My email is fluidhelix@hotmail.com

hi! i can tell u r a good writer, and this story is going to be awesome - so please continue :)