huh. not bad.a good story. update asap pleeze. I want to see what happens.

:) CD

did you name the chapters by the language of your characters, i.e. eno=1 enoen=beginning owt=2 arsrikn=royal?

ok i think i get it.

i take it that you once had a picture between sections, a leaf, and replaced it with "leaf" for fictionpress? huh. why not just use page breaks?

good story, anyway. Jhall's way of speaking is a little confusing, but i managed to figure it out. try couching your explanations in the thoughts of the chracters or something. like "Luc loved Jhall, but still, her inability to understand names confused him still sometimes."

:)CD

okay. i read this chapter a long time ago so i don't know why i didn't review. very nice chapter of coarse. since you told me breanna gave you a good review i kind of feel like i can't say anything of much use. (heh. or i'm just making up excuses >_

Mwa ha ha! I read through chapter three! You are going to print out a copy of this (double spaced) and give it to me, so I can correct all the mistakes you make. Your story is too good to post without correcting everything, because it detracts from the plot. There's a few other things you need to work on than your typing...
Augh! I love it! It makes me happy inside...

I *loved* this sentence...

"Her fingers moved quickly, weaving the air around her into a slowly swirling spiral that whipped up her hair, and blew the summer flower petals into a quickly moving circle."

it creates a gorgeous picture in my mind. I really love Autumn, so that just makes it even more beautiful.
I also like how you sort of took a closer look at how Raeh was feeling about going back into the forest and turning it back to winter. Although, not a whole lot is said...I can understand what she is feeling.
I don't have any problems with this chapter. I absolutely *loved* it.
oh, except one thing. MAKE THE CHAPTERS LONGER! AIE!! I must KNOW what is going to happen! MUST!
*ahem* so, yesh. keep up the awesome work.

please, oh please, oh please, oh please let Jakai and Lia be a couple! they are so cute! argh. um. yesh. well, the LLantra's "talking" seemed to be inconsistent with the pronouns thingy. that's the only thing i could find (and believe me, i looked!) in this chapter. i'll write a longer review, but first i want to get on to the next chapter!

why? why are stories so SAD?! nice job with the descriptions of the fight. It was like watching Rurouni Kenshin. anyways. that was still sad...

eep! I WAS in another dimension. yAy. *ahem* did YOU actually write that poem about the storier? there's no way! if yes, then i bow in awe of your incredible talent. *shakes head in disbelief*

yes... yes. you're amazing.

well. now it makes sense since i know what the "leaf"s mean now. and so now i guess everything is beginning as well.

That is one LONNG poem.

I am impressed. Very detailed and great grammer. Some punctuation (Did I spell that right? I don't think so!) errors, but all in all, good. Thanks for the review. I might revise mine.
Also, since you've told me some of this stuff already, I sort of knew what whas coming, but I didn't think it would be like this.

What are the "Leaf"s

A blind character. Interesting. And what is up with the word "Leaf" that is a paragraph repeated over and over again.

Yoyyoyoyo! help me out here. anybody. well, michelle reviewed...thank you. now everybody else get on it! over and out ~Lia~