Hi. You reviewed one of my stories, so I'm going to review one of yours! Okay, you have a good start but so far, your biggest problem is that you tell us about Blade's life, and you don't show blade's life to us. Like with the things about her sisters, instead of just saying, "thay're my sisters," it would work better if you put in a little anecdote that shows them being little sisters (talking to their mother and calling her "mom," for example). Have I totally lost you? sorry if I have. You have a nice start, anyway.

Hey this is really good! Just kinda short. You might want to put a little more detail or something in the next chapter. It was good though! I liked it. If you have some spare time, could you check out my fic My Life? It's kinda like this. Please update soon! lil lily

this is the very first time that I have submitted a review and it was because the story good! I really like this story and hope that its continued soon. I can't wait to see what happens with James Landon.

Its not great, but its okay. Sometimes it feels like yourt just making a list of sentences, rather than writing a story. Try to be a little more despriptive and write longer chapters! I also think we should get a stronger sense of this characters personality. Other than that, everythings fine! Write more!

This is a good chapter. It tells us a lot about who she is, the things that you desperetly need in a story but isn't as interesting as the stuff in the middle. Keep writing!

This sounds good so far. It would be cool if you could get some dialogue and stuff like that in there, but keeping up the journal is cool too.

that was cool.Ü she sounds like a rebel w/o a cause. lol.Ü

keep it up.. get more romance in there... hehehe.Ü