I pictured some grizzled war verteran chomping a cigar, with a thick accent, talking about this one to some young whippersnapper. Great work with this one! :)

Hmm quite interesting account of the god damn get slim quick **. Like why cant people get off their ** and go to the gym for a change. I liked the style and format. I didn't like the fact that the guy went back on his story ( Oh i forgot to tell you...). other then that it was great.

Well, it's certainly an interesting way to look at things. Wouldn't be half suprised if something like this really did happen sooner or later though. And that narrator - cynical little thing, ain't he? And most certainly morbid! ...I like 'em. =D

Very nicely written. It is also very, very likely. x.0;; scary, if ya think about it. ^_^
Good job!! ::does the whole point-snap Andrew thing::
- A+B

I really liked this. I thought it was very entertaining. Short, too the point. A good piece of original fiction.