Is this a message to anyone in particular? Because what you're describing there, I think, is an actual emotion. It's not jelousy, I forget the name at the moment ... keep writing, though. Love your stuff.

This really sounds like you ahd a bad day ... I know where this comes from, though. We all get this somedays. Well, at least those of us who don't have our same little cliques every day.

You've switched up your style a bit. Both your styles are good, though!

You're making it seem like a song. I don't know whether that's good or bad ... but I know I like it!

It's moving, yet at the same time, it's just poetry ... just poetry. I like how you rhyme words one might think don't rhyme.

Aww, not living up to someone's expectations doesn't make you a loser. This isn't really a loser anthem, it's just standing up to a b*d of a boyfriend. I hope I don't end up with a guy like that. @_@ I want him to like me, blubber and all. Anyway, your rhyming is still quite good and I luv your style. ^_^ I'll read the rest tomorrow. ^_^

For some reason, I've skipped ahead. Anyway, do not worry i will read the other poems. I guess i wanted to do something different.You've really improved here. ^_^ Luv your style. Compared to mine, I so suck. Yuppie, pretty perfect girl makes everything about us seem so...ugly... grr...

Depressing. No offense okay, that popped into my head. But not bad. Rhyming's quite good and I like the repeating stanza:
"Hush, my baby, do not speak a word
Even your cries cannot be heard
Close your eyes and go to sleep
The pain will end when stabbed too deep"
Anyway, you have talent girl. Be confident. ^_^
P.S Chapter 4 of mysteries is up. Thanks for your other reviews. ^_^

Again, really, really, REALLY good! My favorite line was: "Mute from desire and blind with greed." Keep up the good work!
~ Alexz Lynn

Beautiful. Man, this was very good. ^^Keep Writin'^^
~ Alexz Lynn
('Lizzie's Summer has been updated. [[smiles]] so come back and check it out. Thanks!)

i liked this one a lot too. i could relate to basically everything in this. well, except for killing the other person. your rhyming is good, i couldn't tell at all that you had trouble with it. good poem. :)

wow, great poem. it flowed very well and the rhyming was pretty good. what i really liked about this poem was that i didn't get bored with it. despite being pretty lengthy, it held my interest. the only thing i would change would be the last line... it just seemed...less mature than the rest of the piece. great poem overall.

I've took a look at three of your five poems here, divisions 1, 2, and 5, and I have to say damn. I was amazed but, I don't know if it's because I never knew you wrote or if it's just how much I liked them. Also those poems that I didn't get to read I am going to come back and read later for now I have many things that must be done first.

Ah, wonderful last line =D. Once again, beautiful. I like both this and the first much better than the second. The rhyming works well, it all fits together nicely. It's kind of frightening, but I like that in poetry. I get a really strong mental image through it. Great job =D.
chochang913

Wow, this is where you started? 'Tis awesome! My first poetry sucked @$$... LoL, okay, most of it still does. O love the theme of it. You really conveyed the emotion well. Abusive poetry--so sad, so good to read... Thanks for the review ^_^!
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