OO...Intriguing story...Very chilling. I wanna know more about the narrorator, but perhaps I'm asking a bit too early? Either way, I like your story!

I really like the mystery in this one, leaves a lot to be created by the mind, becasue it leaves soooo many topics untouched. Like who she really is, or if she's even real. And if this is a religious metaphor or quite on the contrary. And if shes in agony for herself or for the people, and has come to save them or is sacrificing herself. I guess the mastery in the writing is so good it allows the mind just enough space to wander free, but not too little so it has some foundation for its wanderings. Keep writing, i like this style.

Wow wow wow! My town my town my town! Wow wow wow! Cool! You're using my town! Wow! (Skippadeedoo!) And, yeah, great story, still, duh, it's YOU, and WOW MY TOWN!

great so far please update soon.

Interesting. VERY interesting. I'm intrigued, and for some reason I have an odd attraction to his yellow rain jacket. Don't ask. But it's a great start to what I'm sure will be an even better story, knowing your reputation. So keep it up!

ooh, nifty... I'll d/l the song, too... and I'm sorry for saying Greg got "bruised" X-P