Reviews for Time Stopped, Silence Pounced

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Ramenluver 2008-06-04 ch 1,	abuseHaha, I really loved the first paragraph. A few spelling errors, but all in all, pretty well done. ^ ^ -Ramen
invisiblebob 2006-06-17 ch 5,	abusehehehe! I promise I'm still alive... mostly. Just so busy I almost forgot about this great place. I like the chap and I wish I'd known it was up sooner. I love reading your stuff; it makes me happy. The only thing that kinda worried me was midway thru David and June's fight, the tone seemed to be get a bit darker and angsty. It might just be me tho.
Kinetic Wolf 2006-06-15 ch 2,	abusewow, intersting, i havent reviewed your stuff in like forever, so here it is a review, interesting relation between Derek and David
Dirty White Belt 2006-04-22 ch 6,	abuseOh i love this story.Fabulous darling, just fabulous.Keep up the great work!
Agent Kisa Katya 2006-01-13 ch 1,	abuseHey I really like the start on this, I'm going to start reading the rest of it, just wanted to let you know that I already liked it. :>
EyriNyx 2005-12-31 ch 5,	abuseWOW, its been a while since i have reviewed. Poor June, being thought of as a crazed women with a disorder. She also needs to organize her purse. Small objects dropping onto the floor everytime she has to get her beeper People might really think there is something wrong with her, although David seem to think so already.
calybe 2005-12-24 ch 6,	abuseYou updated! That makes me so happy. I really do like this story. June is a very interesting character. I know you've probably heard this a million times, but her character has a realness to it. There's somethings she does that makes you smile and think 'Hey...I do that.' (like criticising other peoples bathroom. Haha, I loved the comparison the the flamingo!). Plus, she keeps on surprising me. That's always fun. David on the other hand seems more laid back, but I suppose that's because he's not the one with the violent streak and the handbag, hmm? Max is just what I portray an older brother to be like - he promises not to embarass her, but he does anyway. What else are siblings for? Your characters have a sense of realism in them, I love that so much. It's satisfyingly refreshing.
miss-blackhair 2005-12-11 ch 1,	abusethis is a really nice read. i like it. hope to hear from you soon! =)
SpawnMeister666 2005-12-04 ch 6,	abuseThis is quite a bizarre chapter and like the last on it suffers a little bit due to typos and basic errors. Having said that, I just got my first book published and have read through it and thats suffers a little with typos and basic errors too, so I can't really criticise too much! Editing, editing editing. Why is it so difficult to spot mistakes in your own writing when you can instantly see them in every one elses? Or is that just me? I think I need some beer! Spawny
aknightsgoldenrose 2005-11-25 ch 6,	abuseI really love this story so far. The whole fight in the grocery store sounds like something that might actually happen to me. lol
sky77 2005-11-22 ch 6, anon.	abuseWhoa, I totally missed this chapter for some reason O.o Anyways, uh... I think you can ignore my comment about June's character development xD. But wow, what a change. Poor June, she totally has the hots for David ^^ What I love about TS is that the conversation between the characters flows so naturally-- it feels very real. It also goes well with the setting and writing style-- it's New York, fast-paced, and hardly anyone's introspective. You conveyed that sense of briskness and spark really well. And yay for Max! I'm really starting to like the guy =) Highlights: "deciding that it really wasn’t maroon but a horrid mix of swamp mud and the death of a plum-colored flamingo" xD. OH. MY. GOSH. I love you xD. I also loved the June-Max-David interaction there, as bringing in Max actually changes the June-David dynamic as well. I thought that this was a very nice choice to make in TS. Things I'd like to see: Hmm... so what kind of stuff did David and Max do back in college? xD Anyways, I see a few hints here and there about June's love life and what makes her tick. I like her. I really do. I think you did a good job on her character this chapter. Anyways, I'm not sure what else you have planned, but I've noticed that the pace of the story's slowed down a bit. I'm growing kinda curious on how the new jobs will work out for David and June =) Again, good job on this chappie! Wow... when did you go to sleep again? 3 am? xD Lolz, good times. I'll be looking forward to the next segment =)
sky77 2005-11-22 ch 5, anon.	abuseYay for updates! June certainly is a violent person (omgosh, I see what you mean by Maggie and June becoming one composite figure xD), but that makes it all the more fun. Wow, and on another tangent, I think this might be why writing is your stress-reliever/therapy treatment, because uh... your stress certainly shows up in the form of June with a vengeance xD. Umm... and now I'm going to try to do an actual review! Highlight: The fruit-chucking and the various "weapons" found in June's purse. Absolute genius =)I also noticed that your writing style has changed, although you are still the queen of dialogue, so high-fives I am also starting to love June and David tgether. It'll be interesting to see how they end up as a couple though xD. They definitely have a great chemistry and a special spark, which you've managed to convey through their snappy dialogue pretty well =) Some things I'd like to see: more insight into June, because right now, she's a bit of a mystery (and not just for David xD). Is fruit-bashing simply a quirk of hers? Or does it run deeper, stemming from her restrictive childhood and intense need for-- Ok... maybe it is just a quirk xD. But still, I guess I'm also wondering how June as a character works. Aunt Marge seems to know her quite well at least ^^ Anyways, yep. Great chapter. I could tell you had fun writing it =) hugs Good luck with school and college apps too!
murderprotocol 2005-11-22 ch 6,	abuseYou write so well! I love it - especially your cooky characters. It really gives the story dimensions. I found the description of David's shower curtain delightful and Max and David's reunion was a nice touch. I did notice what I think is one mistake. "She needed to collect herself and savage what was left of her pride, if any." Should it be 'salvage' instead of 'savage'? I just can't wait for more. I hope I don't have too wait too many months, although I know all about the pressures of senior year. Good luck and of course, keep writing when you can!! :)
Elizabeth Szorcsik 2005-11-21 ch 6,	abuse”Because I’m stuck here now—stuck here because yougot bored” You missed the space between 'you' and 'got'. I must say, this kept me interested the whole way. I can't wait for more.
Elizabeth Szorcsik 2005-11-21 ch 5,	abusehaha I just can't help smiling. Very nice, I like the plot so far.

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