I couldn't get into the story at all, it made absolutely no sense. The plot doesn't exist.

Your english needs improving, don't keep getting your tenses mixed up.

Proud

GREAT STORY! I'm not usually into this type of thing, but after reading your parody on ff.net i thought i'd check it out. This is really good, and very different! The prolouge was great and really well written so was the first chapter. Please let me know if you're planning to continue. Thanks.
~JessieRose~

Interesting. Write more, please.

oo! so that's what happend! dang! -_-;; it would be interesting to see his reaction when he fully awakes. heh, goes to rob a house wakes up in the body of a vampire! looking forward to more! ^_^
~Archy~

oh wow...*breathes in deeply* that was good! it was really exciting! This prologue had me at the edge of my seat holding my breath! *rushes to next chapter*
~Archy~

This is very interesting. I like the intro and I hope that you put the first chapter up soon!

Good. Keep writing.