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| Liz5 2003-01-27 ch 1,   | My only problem with these stories is that they're too short and that they make you want to read more. The vocabulary, grammar, and vocabulary useage is excellent. The stories are great, I love stories where people die off one by one, so this is great...hehe. You also made it very graphic, which is a GOOD thing, to me, lol. Just make them a little longer...and add some more, maybe, and then you've got yourself a great story. Keep writing!! ~Liz |
| Crow Skyler 2003-01-27 ch 7, | Very nice. ^_^ But, then, you knew I'd say something like that, eh, as it's dark. *g* Poor Kali, drowning in water... --Crow |