Hello Patrick- Hope your writing more new horror stories, because I certainly enjoyed this horror piece.

that gave me the willies spraying a hot gooey substance that lets out steam and makes your gums bleed ew having plastic covering your teeth not pleasant no wonder joe pulled that device away and no wonder he yelled at the stupid dentist and called him an a hole and why was he missing several teeth?why was his mouth wired shut?why was he decapitated from the shoulder on down what did that jerk do to him while he was knocked out? who are all those other psychopaths working on him? he does not know them so therefore he can,t trust them i,ve never liked dentists they,re just as crazy evil psychotic nuts insane weird and creepy as that mad dentist in this old movie doctor decay or something or other i don,t trust doctors nurses medical technicians or dentists ugh {btw that must have been some nasty dentist dream you had were any parts in this fic based on your nightmare if so which parts}

Oh god. That was scary. Now I'M afraid of dentists. Which was kind of the purpose of the story, I guess. Oh well. I had fun reading it, and it actually did freak me out.

~lynx wings

PS. The whole surgery with the arm and the stomach. What was that all about? Selling organs on the black market?

*shudders* I have never liked going to the dentist *shudders again*

Down to basics, as far as I can tell spelling and grammer are fine but neither are my strong points. It flows along without distraction allowing the reader to really get into it.

You really do get an insight to the main character's mind, into what he is think and what he feels.

I am sure there is more to comment on but I can't think of it. Keep on writing.

Grim Writter