Lyrical discriptions in this one, very interesting form you are developing here. Enjoyed this guy,

'I am plagued by the ghosts of economy'

very well developed themes.

-kirney

Well, first of all, it is obviously not a rhyming poem - I don't think that rhming the words would work here. It seems to me like the whole time you're in some desert oasis... but maybe you can't enjoy the shade. I don't know, but I think it's a good sign when the words you use bring images to mind - even if they are not the images you intend. I think it was also a little mournful - missing something you have never had. Wonderful job.

Delightful. I really enjoy the interspersed sections of "the girl." Excellent work.

Oh my Lord, this was absolutely exquisite. I love it! Ahhhh! The imagery, and the wording, and the obvious feeling put into it...my favorite was the seventh one for David. Wow. Absolutely, positively, gorgeous. Wow.

Keep writing! Peace

Now I know what it

is about these kinds of poems that enchants

me.

They all read so

much like prose, like the stories I

never dared to write,

for fear that someone would

read them and smile knowingly, for

fear that no one would read them.

And long poems, short poems, what's

the difference, as long as they

matter? It seems like each is a faint,

quaint portrait that greets the

reader with secrets, secrets so

alive. Secrets so aflame.

Everything is alive in your poems.

EG