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| tropical-forest 2004-12-10 ch 1,  | abuseA very nice short fic - I think it would be interesting if you continued it and elaborated on their realationship and any future events. |
| indi go duck y 2003-10-17 ch 1, | abuseyour writing style is very enjoyable. it's smooth and flows well. and who can't relate to teacher day dreams, eh? keep writing ;), ducky |
| sleeplessdreamer42 2003-06-15 ch 1, | abuseI really liked it! I know how it is to daydream about your teacher... how it is to love your teacher. ANYWAY, I really liked your story. And me just like the others would like you to maybe continue this story. This is a perfect beginning. Keep the good work up! Anika |
| goddessofsnark 2003-05-10 ch 1, | abuseI usually dont attempt to plug one of my fics when I reveiw but DAMN this was really really similar to my fic "Connected Through Their Scars" Only mine is a lot more depressing than this. Mine is also about three times the length. This was REALLY good though, better than mine. I'll echo a previous comment and thatd be if you really wanted to make it better, you should expand on it a bit, give more details to the teacher and the student. Show a previous daydream or something. I can also totally relate to this! Damn, it echoed a dream I had too...where something similar happened to me..and I have daydreams like that in class too. Don't you just hate good looking teachers? AWesome work though, much kudos, keep up the great work!! |
| EnsignAbby 2003-03-25 ch 1, | abuseVery good. A short and more detailed version of what I am trying to capture in my story. Bravo. Although I would like more :) |
| Shamara Ambrose 2003-02-07 ch 1, | abuseHey! Pretty good snippet of a story. I think you should definitely continue this or rewrite it because I think it has potential and so do your writing skills. You can't improve unless you write more and more. Keep practicing and you'll get better at it. I plan on writing a story that kind of focuses on a teacher-student relationship too, but it will be MUCH longer than this one and more INVOLVED. I hope perhaps YOU'LL read it and tell me if I should stick to my dayjob--which is just writing fantasy/supernatural/drama/romance. But mainly, this will be my first attempt at writing a REALISTIC fiction and on top of that, ROMANCE as well--something "Harlequin-worthy" even. This was good. I enjoyed reading it. It was delightful and if you want to rewrite and/or continue it, my suggestion is to put more details, meaning to the characters, the emotions, the actions, the meaning behind the words, and et cetera. Love and farewell from the darkness, ~SHAMARA AMBROSE~ |