I really enjoy the repeating pattern at the beginning.

I think this is good, but the some of the words could be more...complex. I'm not sure if you understand but there are, at least for me, words that are flat and words that mean a lot. I can't give you an example so this advice is kind of useless (I'm pretty bad at explaining things, forgive me!).

Oh, nice!

aww. thats sweet. and sad at the same time.

and no, symbiosis is not real (re: see no evil) i made it up.

Nice. It is strange...but a good kind of strange. I like it. It's well written. Very well done.

What a superb lyrical poem, deadkitty1! Thanks for noting the copyright in the Author's Notes!

Cool poem. It's nice. Hey, guess what, I live in the Philippines. Your name is kinda weird, but I find it cute, in a weird way. Anyway, please please review my story. I need other people's opinion. I'd appreciate if you reviewed, as in really appreciate.

I know how you feel I've Been ignored twice by girls I loved

That was very touching. Dark at times, but very emotional as well. I really liked it.

It's so pretty! I love it! It makes me think of my lover! ::sniff:: sad. I love it.

-Natherapè

Hey thats funny. My friend made the story Lords of the Universe a story i created with my bare hands it was first a comic now an adventuris tale.

but i let him make a story.

oh my story is Dragon Clash if you like Sailor moon and inuhasha then you will absolutly love this.

Later

you remind me of myself, scary as that may seem. although i perhaps don't show the exuberance quite as much.

Short but sweet. That poem really touched a feeling in me. Keep writing. :-)

VERY good poem. I like the ryming and everything.

*Spins around in chair* WE! Ahem. . . I love your poem!