It's really good! ^_^

I'm really impressed! Not to mention...I also envy you @_@...Love the historical accuracy.

Really it was the most entertaining read yet.

Thank You. ^_^

Hey, that's pretty good. :-)

Wow! This is really good! I do pray that you continue on with this tail as I would love to know what happens to Hophni and Maadai!

Very well told! An excellent story!

Thank you for sharing this!

As I mentioned before, a very good start. I am curious to see how this will go on from this point. Will you show the young Hophni grow up (ie, let us see the boyhood experiences that shape him), or re-introduce him as a young man? I wonder if he will choose to physically fight on behalf of his people, like Bar Kochba or Maccabee, or be a pacifist and use his words instead?
Time will tell, (or rather, YOU will); I'll be patient. *^_^*