I realy like this story I hope to be reading more soon

I need to do some criticism but I will be nice. First off, inm several of your descriptions you repeat yourself. ie; "it crashed against the small build of the rock, the small waves..." Don't restate the same word within at least two paragraphs apart from each other. Instead of saying small waves call them miniture waves or something like it. It just doesn't sound good to restte yourself like that unless you do it for a special reason or emphisas. Another thing is; proofread your story better before you submit it. I say several errors that spell check had missed. Other than that, You write very impressive descriptions and Your story is pretty original and gripping (well not gripping since it''s on the internet and I can't really "grip" onto the computer. It's very interesting and you have me hooked) I hope my advice will have helped you to become an even better writer and improve your skills. don't be discouraged from my criticism please. I really think that you have a good stpry here. Keep up the good writing.~more cowbell~ Homey

Great story, Ollie. Some gramatical errors here and there as well as like.. 1 spelling error.. Great job! =) Good luck on writing the rest of it..

On another short note, this book is kind of like The Neverending Story by Michael Ende. However, Almayic Routes is much more interesting.

I personally loved this one because of the cat. I like the setting and the overall story is great!! Make sure to make a Eikoe/Kagome one too! Keep up the good work, muwah. :D

GREAT WORK!
Keep this going, Gem, I want more of it to read >:D

Very nice Ollie ^_^ You've got a talent! LoL, good job. I can't offer much advice because I'm as good at writing as I am at flying, so I just offer congrats and support on a good job.

*coughs*j/k This one's great. I hope to hear more on it. I'm about to read your other one.:D