I loved the "peep-in peep-out" part.
It's almost like an old nursery rhyme.

peep-peep! heheh happy indeed. how beautiful.

That WAS good. I thought it was very cute to think of the stars as a family in the sky, because everyone tends to make them seem all "mystical" and junk like that. Quite the refreshing metaphor!
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Such an interesting portrayal of innocence... I particularly liked that way you described the way they glitter...

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Ah- very pretty description because the 'Peep-in, peep-out' is like stars twinkling, which is beautiful. 'darkness falls completely,/ but not absolutely' is a clever line too, gives this blanket, cosy atmosphere.
Not more than a cute description, but it's well done.

Incredible work. I liked how you made the stars as if they were playing games. That made a beautiful image.


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Very beautiful. Enchanting and beautiful, like a lullaby. Ah...

Heehee, pretty. This was a good topic for a poem, and I like a lot of the lines...The darkness falls completely,
but not absolutely."
~God bless~

I don't know much about poetry, but I liked it. It would make a nice song.