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| Isca 2008-06-01 ch 1,  | abuseI loved the "peep-in peep-out" part. It's almost like an old nursery rhyme. |
| singinstrawberri 2004-08-20 ch 1, | abusepeep-peep! heheh happy indeed. how beautiful. |
| OutlawEris 2004-01-31 ch 1, | abuseThat WAS good. I thought it was very cute to think of the stars as a family in the sky, because everyone tends to make them seem all "mystical" and junk like that. Quite the refreshing metaphor! £§£§ OutlawEris £§£§ |
| Getuie 2003-11-12 ch 1, | abuseSuch an interesting portrayal of innocence... I particularly liked that way you described the way they glitter... |
| Needa S 2003-11-10 ch 1, | abuseAmazing job! Beautiful!! I would like to see you come join my site. If you would like to check it out click on the link on my profile. By all means keep on writing... |
| SweetGrape 2003-11-08 ch 1, | abuseAh- very pretty description because the 'Peep-in, peep-out' is like stars twinkling, which is beautiful. 'darkness falls completely,/ but not absolutely' is a clever line too, gives this blanket, cosy atmosphere. Not more than a cute description, but it's well done. |
| Keep it 100 2003-10-29 ch 1, | abuseIncredible work. I liked how you made the stars as if they were playing games. That made a beautiful image. ~Heart of the Sword |
| thepeacekeeper 2003-06-01 ch 1, | abuseVery beautiful. Enchanting and beautiful, like a lullaby. Ah... |
| Deana Bell 2003-05-28 ch 1, | abuseHeehee, pretty. This was a good topic for a poem, and I like a lot of the lines...The darkness falls completely, but not absolutely." ~God bless~ |
| John Ink 2003-02-13 ch 1, | abuseI don't know much about poetry, but I liked it. It would make a nice song. |