Hey! I liek your story! You might want to proof read it a little cause every now and then you have a word that is misplaced like having walk instead of work. But other then that its great. Keep up the great work^^

Great writing! I like the way you changed the traditional werewolf thoughts. Good job! Update soon!

YAY! 4 chappies! (I'm starting to sound like Mrs. Mooney and her "spermies" LOL) Great job! Do u think Ms. B will like her b-day present? Why am I talking about that now? Don't ask. Anyways, great chapter, Colleen!
~Manda~

glad to c u updated.longer chapters plz!

You've got potential. In all honesty, your style really reminds me of how I used to write. You shy away from any description and focus entirly on dialogue. I understand why you do this, but I think it's something you have to try to fix. You don't need get bogged down in description like so many young writers do. You just need to throw in the kind of little details that makes a story memorable. Make the reader feel more like they are a part of the story, an accomplice if you will, instead of just watching it unfold.

Your dialogue is fairly tight but you should read over it because there are a few points where it sound un-natural. I also think that you don't always need to have the characters say everything, after all, this isn't a screenplay. Points where a character relates some of the backstory (as when the girl tells her father that he should have been head of the pack) feel un-natural.

I'm sorry to be so critical. I think you have potential and just need to develope a bit.

Hey Colleen, where's the "thanks to Manda for coming up with what Kyle looks like"? I'M SO UNLOVED! LOL JK! This is getting really interesting! You go, girlfriend! LOL You should show this story to M.H. He'd LOVE it! (^_~)

~Manda~

love it.!

love it.!

W-A-N-T M-O-R-E!

This is a good story and I love the name AAliyah because she was my favorite singer. You should update soon.
*Peace*

I still like Steve better! LOL! I didn't even have to read this cuz I read it when you e-mailed it to me, but oh well, I did anyways! And if you bring that pic over, you do realize that we'll just burn it anyways! LOL It can't get into the wrong hands! (^_^)

Luv your BFF+4L,

Manda (Ranma+Akane4Ever)

(For those of you who aren't Colleen but are still reading this, don't mind my strangeness. It's inside stuff (^_~))

This sounds interesting so far! Great job! Hehehe! I can't wait for your next update. Oh and you forgot to review chapters 2+3 of "Star-Crossed Love" just to let you know! I can't wait to read the rest of this! It's really clever!

Lyl!

Your BFF+4L,
~Ranma+Akane4Ever~ (^_^)

I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH! UPDATE REALLY SOON!

luv ya,
Alicia A.

love the story so far.plz do update!!