That's a very poignant and beautiful poem. I agree with the last reviewer that it would make a great story...but it's also a great piece to stand on it's own. Very interesting idea and your writing flows very smoothly. Great job!

Wow, this is really great. The idea here is really original and refreshing. This could be a really great story.

Very nice job! Thumbs!

Arrivederci!

-Terra Tigra-