Reviews for Devil's Masquerade

Toby
2004-11-18
ch 1, anon.

abuseWow, sallyrei is teaching us all that we should enjoy being ourselves. Well, I'd love to be you, sallyrei. you are so deluded that you skip notes, give nasty reviews and then get to act all high and mighty. Well, I’m going to give you my sallyrei version of honesty right now:
My first thought when I started to read your story was “this makes me want to throw up.” I wrote like you when I was in seventh grade. I was good too. For a seventh grader. Your “twist ending” became obvious after the first three paragraphs.
I wish I could be like you. I wish that my heels could tap the pavement like a clock. So far, I haven’t been able to make them do that, despite many attempts. They always seem to click, or clop, but never tick or tock. Oh, look. I almost rhymed. Kind of like you in your little childrens’ poem. That was beautiful. It would have made mother goose herself cry. Until she realized that you probably stole it from her. You were very right. We should never try to be anything but our own pitiful little selves. In an attempt to be a wonderful writer like you, I have composed a short piece.

I Wish I was a Writer

I wish I was a writer
as good as sallyrei
if only I was her
even for a day

I wish that I could write
like when I was ten
I wrote such beautiful stories
about clock shoes and crazy men

I wish that I could write
five novels in three years
but never get them published
because they suck.

Maybe I could write like her.
But that would take a lobotomy
Sallyrei is God
not like you or me

Her word is final judgment
she casts it from above
her words are very hateful
but always meant in love

Someday I will write
something she will adore
My life will be complete
for that is all I wish for

I wish I was a writer
just like sallyrei
she is my one true idol
that’s all I have to say.

Siri
2003-06-10
ch 2, anon.

abuseThis is a good start! It's a great idea. I liked the poem-type thing at the beginning. Please carry on with this!

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