so damn true!! this world is covered up by a fake layer of beauty, it makes u believe that its actually lovely, but what u will never suspect, is the lie and ugliness hidding beneath it. ^_^ thats why i never believe in anyone, i knew very well that all my friends are just using me ^-^ I dun take them seriously, of course ^^

u no, we have a lot of things in common. im a loner, really, i dun have any true friends. I can see through the friendly mask they wear everyday and discover the true, ugly, evil side of them.

i'm sick of my life, i hate it so much! i hate this world! Thats why, you can only trust in urself, and survive in this dark world on ur own. Strengths, physically and mentaly, is what you need in order to survive.

okay enough with my ** ^^ Love your ficcy! so goodie and true! LOVED IT! ^^

Don't worry, I'll watch out. ^_^ You're right, we cannot trust anyone in this society we live in. You brought up an excellent point in this essay. Anyway, it's a really good p.o.v. on the way you see the world in which we live in.

Jelly

OMG! That was so emotional! I fell in love with it. Oh man, I'm hyperventalating here. That is such a true outlook! You write so well! Keep it up!

Watch those verb tenses.

I like the imagery you created with this piece but it feels like an incomplete work. It has more potential than that; you should really make the reading of your work seemless so as not to detract from the message you wish to express.

I can't say I'm a fan of angst literature for the simple fact that it's all really the same. They pretty much all consist of a realization that the world is not the way the author envisioned it (usually brought on by a break up) and the disappointment that follows. All teens have these feelings. simply describing one's own disillusionment brings nothing new to the table. What is it that you're gonna do about this "ugly world?"

Of course, if you wrote this to get something off your chest, all the more power to you. Just be aware that there are people who accept the world as it is and even thrive in it. Don't just assume that they're ignorant or evil. Perhaps you have more to learn than you think.

O wow, very true. A very powerful, bitter sweet writing. I loved it.