I've read this before, and I like it even more upon reading it again. The only thing I don't like is the word she in the last line. It bothers me. Anyway.

Wonderful imagery, and appeals to my overly-minimalistic-self. Two big toes up!

--Jared

I feel as if your poem really explains social outcasts in this society of ours. Nice way to put it in a poem, and your poem clearly expresses it in a short and to the point way. Maybe a little more description would make your poem even better!

Ps: Read and review my poems, too! I'd love to have your input!

I enjoyed the observation described. Perhaps more description of the event would give more insight to the reasons behind the tought, but the message was clear. Social criticism is the funnest to write sometimes. Observing people and behavior and posture is a great source to write about perfect strangers and develop his or her lifestory. Very nicely and compactly done!