That was a little confusing, but very intense, and pretty good for being a dream- interesting.

:D Oo! I liked it. It was really interesting, and fun. Full of action. Liked. -thumbs up-

A very cool short story with well written combat. Kept my interest through to the very end, something that is pretty hard to do, great job.

- Abbreviations, Open Up My Eager Eyes

I got a little lost toward the end there. By the time I got to the knives, the only thing registering in my brain was "zombies in a bar...blood everywhere...what kind of psycho has dreams like this?!!" I don't fully understand what Chaco and Marilee have to do with anything. Judging by your other reviews, I'm the only confused one here. Oh my.

-Leila

Wow. Very exciting, it's like an explosion in my mind to read. The way it moves very quickly, it's very compressed. Wonderful.

I wish I had dreams like that. While the writing is slightly confusing, it's an excellently spun yarn. Good description and a cracking pace makes me want to read more and more.

Very well written. Nice use of details, not over loaded with description or lack of. You really know what you're writing, which is actually rare to be honest. This is quite the story, real capitivating. Keep this up.

-Sulia Shincho-