I like it! However, it's just a personal preference of mine (and I have a massive headache right now), usually, double spacing lines on Fiction Press gives your chapters a neater look/feel.

It might not be right by formal standards but...

I should shut up >_

Wow...you have a very beautiful way of expressing the words. This is an amazing piece. I hope you continue with it.

~~Trinity

Wow, I love it already! Please continue!

Very neat and nice, but there were a few spelling errors here and there. I like the story, although it's a bit short. Hope you continue.-pax

This is good stuff.
Looking forward to some more. *smile*
~Hannah

I enjoy your writing. I can get lost in imagining the story rather than noticing the language or the style, or the lack of either. I hope I can read more of your work.

I like it. You have a nice writing technique. I hope you do more.

I really like this. You are a very good writer.