I like the plot, nice characters!

Lovely overally dear, maybe work on the dialogue a bit? It seems like you're rushing the story...

Aww is this the end?

The summary sounds nice-- you haven't got much here, but I'd like to see more! Keep going-- please?

Little factual error in ch. 1: Campbell's have a factory in Norfolk, so the soup we get in England is perfectly good, thank you. (Anyway, keeping things for a long time is what tins are *for*!)

The other thing is the air tickets: do werewolves get exemption from security checks or something?

Other than that, a good start: keep it coming, please.

Pretty good start. Very much a stream-of-conciousness piece [which isn't a bad thing, it's more of a style preference to me]. The vampire-werewolf thing is quite interesting, very original. One thing that I think could be worked on is that many of the events occuring seem very much as if they are just used as fillers. Though I have no problem with this, try not to use too many of them, because then the story may begin to loose interest to the reader. Otherwise, the story is pretty cool, pretty promising

~Jess