Hi, I;ve only gotten through this many chapters (I'll keep at it, they're throughly entertaining) but I thought I'd stop and review in the strictest sense of the word (as in "distinct from the phrase -mindless praise-") Your stories are cute and start off well, the middle is fine, it's just the end I have a bone to pick with. It almost sounds like they're missing a punch line. I know your stories arent jokes but I can't really think of how else to describe it. The story just kinda drops off at the end with a weak conclusion that leaves a watery feel to the whole anecdote. As for what to do instead, short of adding a punch line I'm not sure, I'm just here to be a snot and review. ^_^ But truly, I do like your work and will contine to make my way through the cyber tome.
Ciao
MissLotus Eater

That is really great! Good job!

I found this through the member ads section and, so far, I have no regrets. Your writing style is enjoyable enough (though now I know more about bakeries than I need to) and it's obvious you know how much work is involved when writing. The simple fact that there are no typos or grammatical errors...beautiful.

Judging from the number of chapters, it looks like there's plenty left to tell. Good work!

Strider

i've enjoyed reading this, nice work. i hope youre havin fun writin it!

Lol, misspellings can be very interesting. About four years ago in school we were making acrostics w/our names of things describing us: like for bekah i'd put Basketball player, Energetic, etc. Well this one kid put Rapper but he left out one of the p's so my friend and i were outside of the classroom, reading them~ they were posted on the wall, on display~ and we're both like holy ** Brandon's a RAPER!?! It was so funny, and we still laugh about it today!

Danny Radclife is HOTT! Dear God thats a lil disturbing, but i'm SURE you don't look masculine...

lol, that would be quite an experience!

i like this so far. i've been seeing it in the bio section for ages and never got around to reading it, but i finally did, and i like it!

Wow, these are pretty fun. Haven’t got all the way through them yet, but I can definitely relate. I’ve been writing about some of my work-related experiences as well under the title “People are funny.” Just when you think you’ve heard every stupid question someone comes up and enlightens you. You have a good set of ethics too. Don’t ever let anyone tell you otherwise. Keep up the good work!

this is really good. really makes you think about what really goes on at your grocery store other than the employees that go crazy from the muzak.

Love the new chapters. Keep on going!

Wow, this story is great. It takes something to take seemingly ordinary stories like this and turn them into something so utterly hilarious and entertaining, not to mention keeping it going for 29 chapters. Nice authoring.
(and thanks for reviewing my poem) :)

This is great. Write more when you get the chance!

This is hilarious! You have a talent for just picking things out of your life and writing them so humorously. :)

*holds in giggles* My, that sounds mortifying!