That was so good. A lot happened, and I was shocked and intrigued. I loved your descriptions,a nd I like the story. I don't think it needs much improvement, although I would probably change it a lot of the story was mine. Please, write more. I'll be waiting...

I absolutely loved this! You're very very talented! I think we need to more about Asher, but you can touch up on that in the next part! ^.^ In my opinion, first chapters should introduce the main characters (for the most part) and should capture your interest.

I've just noticed...after reading all your stories, they're ALL under my favorite stories list! ^.^ I hope you can read my stuff and give me some good feedback - that is, once I have enough time to post it!

Jesus, I loved this! I want more, NOW! It's a good basic story. I would like to know what Asher does now. Why does he have these powers? Are they a blessing or a curse?

Oh and "If I don’t feel, then nothing can harm me…" is one of the most poetic and truthful things I've ever read!

I enjoyed it and think you should definitely continue with this story. We need to know how he gained such powers and what he'll do with them; will he ever learn to control them or will they control him?