where's the update? the fic is good, but you need to uhmm..make your writing more mature. there should be more details but not too much. also, make a twist in the cliche. and also.. you're writing.. cliche-y, like.. uhmm.. puddle of tears.. sad excuse for a human being.. well not them exactly but the other ones. it's okay to use them.. but not too much. all in all, it's good, and you have a good plot. you read cate tiernan's sweep, huh? ur fic and the book have lots of common stuff but that may just be a coincidence.. if you haven't read the series.. read it! it's really good.

Please hurry. This story has got me hanging onto hte edge of my seat because it is that good.

The story is really good, but on chapter 13, something is wrong. I got only as far as to the part where after Kat got the cut on her face, to which Kill was touched her face and said: Hell. Please fix it

update soon. please? at least give us the ending...T_T

i miss this story... hope u update soon!

cool story are you finished with it or just busy with other things right now?

love it love it love it! update soon :D

I really enjoyed reading your story PLEASE UPDATE! Great story...

eh- im not lovin the way the story is going right now- it seems liek this lame thing has just gotten blown out of proportion- eh- they better get over it soon- i want them to get over it- im like "please- just shut up and forgive each other- go make out or something- " ya know? jeez- i love the story- im sad to see them be all cranky.

I really like the idea going on here. Please update soon!

About time you updated...This was a good chapter but I almost deleted you from my author list because it took so long...

another great chapter! hope u update soon!

OMG! I just read all the chapters from 1 to 24 in one sitting, it was just that good. My chest tightened whenever along with the sad scenes, pathetic i know. Anyways, keep up the good work and update soon please.

hey hey! look at the new kid! see how he runs!mara

Well... You updated quickly which is good, and you have restructured your paragraphs which means I can still see straight. The fact that you are exploring your creative side is excellent so keep up with it, like you mentioned it is a piece of fiction so like J.K Rowling did- Go crazy with your ideas... I look foward to your next chapter and do appreciate that you are trying to piece together a story, it is not always easy. From your style of writting I get the impression you are only a highschool student so there are plenty of years to perfect your grammar and spelling just maintain that you do not continue to criticise yourself as it gives the wrong impression to some readers that you are not completely confident in what you write, when you should be because after all, everything you write is written a certain way for the reason of your liking.