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| un-in-hibited 2005-07-20 ch 1,  | abusei really like this. |
| breakdown in the waiting ro... 2004-06-20 ch 1, | abuseFrom the opening of this it's like a curled upper lip, detesting someone by beauty. (Like telling someone in French you hate them so they don't know what you're saying). You use rhyme and repitition wonderfully. Another one of my favourites, next to "My Sweet, Androgynous 'Lover'." -Jess |
| Kimjoy85 2004-02-14 ch 1, | abuseI like this, I like it a lot. Definetly going on my faves. |
| Kelpylion 2004-01-14 ch 1, | abuseI am now aching internally, yet staring in bedazzlement externally. Perfect words. Genious. I don't care that this is romance (I usually boycott it)- this goes in the favourites! |
| romancingthemoon 2003-09-13 ch 1, | abusewas this supposed to be a song? it's a little awkward in the rhythm department. still it's a good read. you are really brilliant |
| Leilyra 2003-04-14 ch 1, | abuse'Beautiful' sums it up. Being a mom, makes me think of my little girls and all I've watched them go through growing up. Where was you heart when you wrote this? Or should I ask, who was on your heart? |
| fontanellemonster 2003-04-03 ch 1, | abuse"Hello, beautiful and aren’t you brave you bear your cross and dig your grave like it’s nothing...nothing... Hello, beautiful and aren’t you sweet You’ve got stars in your hair and hearts on your feet with broken wings and you’ll fly back to me someday and talk to me about the most treacherous things Hello, beautiful. Hello, beautiful." Oh, that's got to be one of the most beautiful things I've read today (I went to a scary mental hospital, and there were the most incredible poems on the wall)...I really really really admire your writing skills, and God, I envy them like hell. |
| JazzPizza 2003-03-02 ch 1, | abuseForgive my current ineptness at reviewing. To me this seems like a contrast between light and dark, like the light of the beautiful, innocent one who will lose her innocence, interacting with the darkness of one already jaded. I could just be a fruitcake. Anyway.I liked this. |
| dolce 2003-02-28 ch 1, | abuseWell, I like it. Gives me happy vibes. I wish I could write a nifty tune to go along with this. Unfortunately, my skills in that department are severely lacking. D: |
| Wrong Name Tag 2003-02-28 ch 1, | abuseAwesome song. It all flows wonderfully together, and the phrases easily work with one another. Can imagine an awesome tune to go with it. Great job ~Jess |