Reviews for Key To Your Heart

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Vinson 2008-03-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseI've been reading this story almost from the day you uploaded it. I've reviewed under several names, but none of that is important. All that matters is whether you're going to update this or not? I've given up on all but four FP stories and this is one of them. It's not incredibly important (I'm not that sad, luckily), but I'd love to find out what happens to these characters. I'm a James/Nikki fan, gotta admit. I want to see how it works out for them. If it means anything at all, you've got at least one reader left. Be inspired! (Yeah, right.) Update some time. Best of luck!
Instant-Soup 2007-06-10 ch 29,	abusecute on a cute stick in a cute tree in an angsty way =] x
Shadesome 2006-08-28 ch 29,	abuseThis SO needs to be updated! ah!
Kilian 2006-08-11 ch 29,	abuseArgh! I want to know what will happens (crying like the selfish baby I am) I will camp there until you post the next chapter (start pouting like… err well a selfish baby) and by the way I really like the story.
randomperson 2006-03-29 ch 29, anon.	abuseWow, I LOVE your story!! hugs Lami I feel so inadequate as a writer... whimpers. Your Nikki/James interaction is really interesting, and the summaries you sometimes do at the start of the chapter are hilarious!! I love the dry wit and humour. Took me a wee while getting used to the different format for speech and thoughts, but it still works really well. You wouldn't consider updating anytime soon please? puss-in-boots outta shrek look I'd love to read more! waves bye!!
Natasha 2005-12-22 ch 3, anon.	abuseOh my Goddess.. I think I love you. O.O
Collar de Espinas 2005-11-23 ch 29,	abuseI love you. YOU UPDATED! ...Over a year later, but it's an update! I'll try and refrain from squealing fan-girlishly and throwing myself at you. Oh, I've missed this story...
Erotic Antibiotic 2005-10-27 ch 29,	abuseyay! New chapters were good... now i have to wait for the newest. :o/ Great job and welcome back. -Erotic Antibiotic(imprisoned soul)
Theron Laganas 2005-10-22 ch 29, anon.	abuseWell, I don't know what to say. I suppose I can start by saying I was pretty gobsmacked to see you'd updated after... what, eighteen months? And I've been reading this story for a long, long time. I used to be hudson_396 when I first started back in early 2003. I always liked reading this story. I, like many others, loved James' character and kept coming back more for him than Brett and Gabriel. I think what I enjoy most about this story is that's it's slightly more adult than most of the fluff on FictionPress... but anyway, these new chapters were welcome but awkward. Your style of writing is very hard to follow, mostly when it comes to dialogue. You don't use quotation marks to signal when someone is talking, but when they are thinking something instead. And you place breaks inbetween paragraphs and dialogue -- for example, "as James responded" (two lines down) - He went where? -- which is confusing. There are some spelling errors but who cares about that. This has become mostly "The James Show" but I like that. I just don't know what to say other than I didn't enjoy this as much as I would have expected, but I definitely want you write more... whenever you can. That's about it.
chibicherrychan 2005-10-10 ch 8,	abuseLoved the interraction between Gabriel and Brett in this chapter. Brett shutting Gabriel up, so he wouldn't share anything he didn't want to; that was cute. The whole confusion between the two was simply adorable. Gabriel sharing after all, somehow at ease with Brett... those two are so cute. Eight down; nineteen to go! lol. Well, I've gotta go so I'll get back to those later. Meanwhile, keep writing.
chibicherrychan 2005-10-10 ch 7,	abuseoh yeah, first-kiss scene so very hot! Let me say this; I have somehow developed an obsession with grammar, spelling and what-not errors. I even go back to read reviews that I have left to check that I haven't mispelled anything; it is that bad. Normally, I can't make it through a chapter of a story that has typos. You do make mistakes, I'm sure you are aware of that, besides, who doesn't -point them out; I'll kill them, and we'll be back to everybody makes errors. The point I'm trying to make is that for once, I couldn't bring myself to care that there were mistakes; I just loved the story and felt that with its length, it was still amazingly written. Typos... who cares! The story is captivating; the characters are believable and lovable... yeah, I love your story.
chibicherrychan 2005-10-10 ch 6,	abuseNikki! Always glad to see him! James still felt like somekind of shadow or ghost at this point. I just found him so spooky; his saying he'd been keeping an eye on Gabriel didn't help the feeling. Then he goes and says he'll fix things with Harry; in my mind, he turned into a bully or something like that, but I know better... At least, he wasn't so far gone that Brett believed there was no way he'd notice him this time.
chibicherrychan 2005-10-10 ch 5,	abuseRumor spreads and jerks hear it. Amazing how a few words, a twisted reality can ruin so much. Two are touched by this female tendancy to publicize whatever they have heard without bothering to check it up; they don't want truth; they want gossip. Aw, poor little boys. I can just imagine Brett's unease.
chibicherrychan 2005-10-10 ch 4,	abuseAh, see? I wasn't too far off. It's in the fourth chapter that you explain how Brett is choosing for the first time. Also is the first time James does "something", I think. At first, he didn't appeal much to me; the junkie boy never really was my type. However, I love this; we meet him while he doesn't say much and is high; we just don't know him, but we learn to through the chapters, as we would in real life, and he actually turns out to be quite the lovable one. Gabriel beating himself up for things he has no control over... I just feel like roughing him up a bit. He's an OK guy. I just hate that some people actually feel the same way he does... poor thing.
chibicherrychan 2005-10-10 ch 3,	abuseAh-ha! Enters Nikki! This is when I decided that he was my favorite character. Yep, doesn't get along, doesn't watch what he's saying; he was blunt and kinda rude, and I still loved him right away. Shower scene, now that was nice. Brett trying not to do it but unable to resist, and the unexpected thought of Gabriel... I like how he for once chooses the man while he usually is chosen. Real attraction, not settling for what comes but going after what he wants... well, that's not quite in the third chapter but still. Also, Jari is back again! Lovely fellow that we just learn to care about.

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