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Reviews For: Please

Vost Thenen 2007-05-15 ch 1,	abuseWoo hoo hoo, It's all been done. Good piece, good use of negation to create contrast. The rhyme scheme does get a little...peculiar in places, but it's very heartfelt, very real. Perhaps you should start writing again?
Winter's Roar 2004-02-07 ch 1,	abuseoh my goodness that was brilliant, sheer and utter brilliance. That was one of the best poems i've read in quite some time, so powerful. The tone was innocent and pleading, almost quietly hurt at times, really gets to the reader in a strong way. I really like how you rhymed at times throughout the poem but not consistantly throughtout the whole thing. I think it would have taken away from the honesty of the poem if you had tried to force the feelings and thoughts to rhyme. I love the ending also, fabulous. You express the confussion in a wonderful way and this piece leaves the readers to decide for themselves how they feel. We get the idea the guy is just playing/messing around but at the same time the way he makes you feel leaves us breathless. Beautifully written, such an intricate mess of details that captures the readers attention. Your word use is excellent and the images are very clear. Hats off to you on a marvelous poem!! ~ winter
Laksha 2004-01-31 ch 1,	abuseWhoa, that's beautiful. It makes me want to cry. And it rhymes too! sniffle
Victor Soulstorm 2003-11-05 ch 1,	abuseI don't know how better you could have captured being completely torn. I could almost feel it from here. thanks for the reviews and keep writing.
Kyaroru Fanel 2003-08-02 ch 1,	abuseI like the feelings that are evoked from this poem, but I don't quite like the way it rhymes, then it doesn't, then...well, you get the idea. Still, a great piece of writing! ^_^
the smart monkey 2003-07-30 ch 1,	abuseI really like this poem, and it is mostly because I can relate to it personally. I hate guys who mess around with me! Lol, 'kay, sorry, I'm mellowing out the deepness of this poem. Really, I like it. One of my faves. Checks 'Add author to my favorite authors list'
aussie88l 2003-05-14 ch 1,	abusepretty good! not a very good poetry reader/critic, but i must say i read this one from head to toe, which is saying A LOT, since i usually just go, "oh, what fun, someone trying to be Robert Frost and sucking at it"
Bob n Kazzi 2003-05-04 ch 1,	abuseBrilliant. I wish I had a guy who would make me feel like that. :(
Special K Birmingham 2003-04-22 ch 1,	abuseYour feelings come across so well in this. You've managed to portray them really well. Keep it up.
Plato's Optic Runaway 2003-04-12 ch 1,	abuseaw...that's so sweet...sniffles almost breaks my heart...if i had one. hehehehehehee... ghost seto: grins me: yes, we love you. i am feeling strangely perky at the moment, so i am greatly moved by this. fictionpress is fun! i'm actually working on my account a lot. 7 stories!! i feel special. evil crappy organized site is our friend. that poem is so neat. cute...dont you think so, maliky?? malik: sweat drop...i hate it when you act like this... me: innocently like what...? malik: well...human... me: ah, well, you know...glomps him if i wasn't human i couldn't do that. well, i'm not, but IT'S COMPLICATED! wacks self with blunt object there. confusion all gone. happiness. now i'm going to attempt to finally read your angel of death story you asked me so long ago to read, though i might not get far...but i'll at least get the first chapter! sighs ^O^ ~HoST~ ^O^
Phercraban 2003-03-20 ch 1,	abuseHey! Nice poem, I really like it. Good job, and I know the feeling. Same all the time. Just being a toy for guys. In EVERY way. But that's something you dont really need to know...great work! Phercraban
Trama Yami 2003-02-28 ch 1, anon.	abuseIt's about me, right? i couldn't tell, but it IS all about me, right? any way, i really liked it. Luv: ty
Sade's Liz 2003-02-27 ch 1,	abuseThat was great. A truly good poem.

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