Woo hoo hoo, It's all been done. Good piece, good use of negation to create contrast. The rhyme scheme does get a little...peculiar in places, but it's very heartfelt, very real. Perhaps you should start writing again?

oh my goodness that was brilliant, sheer and utter brilliance. That was one of the best poems i've read in quite some time, so powerful. The tone was innocent and pleading, almost quietly hurt at times, really gets to the reader in a strong way. I really like how you rhymed at times throughout the poem but not consistantly throughtout the whole thing. I think it would have taken away from the honesty of the poem if you had tried to force the feelings and thoughts to rhyme. I love the ending also, fabulous. You express the confussion in a wonderful way and this piece leaves the readers to decide for themselves how they feel. We get the idea the guy is just playing/messing around but at the same time the way he makes you feel leaves us breathless. Beautifully written, such an intricate mess of details that captures the readers attention. Your word use is excellent and the images are very clear. Hats off to you on a marvelous poem!!
~ winter

Whoa, that's beautiful. It makes me want to cry. And it rhymes too! *sniffle*

I don't know how better you could have captured being completely torn. I could almost feel it from here. thanks for the reviews and keep writing.

I like the feelings that are evoked from this poem, but I don't quite like the way it rhymes, then it doesn't, then...well, you get the idea. Still, a great piece of writing! ^_^

I really like this poem, and it is mostly because I can relate to it personally. I hate guys who mess around with me! Lol, 'kay, sorry, I'm mellowing out the deepness of this poem. Really, I like it. One of my faves. *Checks 'Add author to my favorite authors list'*

pretty good! not a very good poetry reader/critic, but i must say i read this one from head to toe, which is saying A LOT, since i usually just go, "oh, what fun, someone trying to be Robert Frost and sucking at it"

Brilliant. I wish I had a guy who would make me feel like that. :(

Your feelings come across so well in this. You've managed to portray them really well. Keep it up.

aw...that's so sweet...*sniffles* almost breaks my heart...if i had one. hehehehehehee...

ghost seto: *grins*

me: yes, we love you. i am feeling strangely perky at the moment, so i am greatly moved by this. fictionpress is fun! i'm actually working on my account a lot. 7 stories!! i feel special. evil crappy organized site is our friend. that poem is so neat. cute...dont you think so, maliky??

malik: *sweat drop*...i hate it when you act like this...

me: *innocently* like what...?

malik: well...human...

me: ah, well, you know...*glomps him* if i wasn't human i couldn't do that. well, i'm not, but IT'S COMPLICATED! *wacks self with blunt object* there. confusion all gone. happiness. now i'm going to attempt to finally read your angel of death story you asked me so long ago to read, though i might not get far...but i'll at least get the first chapter! *sighs* *^O^* ~HoST~ *^O^*

Hey! Nice poem, I really like it. Good job, and I know the feeling. Same all the time. Just being a toy for guys. In EVERY way. But that's something you dont really need to know...great work!
Phercraban

It's about me, right? i couldn't tell, but it IS all about me, right?

any way, i really liked it.

Luv: ty

That was great. A truly good poem.