What? That jerk HIT her? Hmph. High school boys *snort*

dude! that's cool. kinda confuzzeling, but hey! I'm sure it will make sense one day to me. must re-read and eat sugar. YAY! SUGAR! still very cool, and interesting. I AM NOT HYPER! well. not too hyper!

this sounds really cool! must go read chapter two. it better not be the end, or else i shall come after you with a mob with pitchforks, Jessie and sugar. yes. anyway! *looks around for insperation* keep on writing!

I'd log in, but I don't feel like it right now. Heh heh.

Well anywho, very descriptive. But. It was kind of confusing. I know how it is for something to be really hard to explain simpler than it already is but. Yeah. It was hard to understand. Maybe you should try to simplify things a bit more.
~Kitsune

Wow.this is deep. I've got this thing about time. I believe in time travel. Yes, I'm weird, and too old to believe in fairy tales, but.

Anyway, all "maniacal" :P ramblings aside, this is VERY interesting. If you've seen this place for real, direct me to the entrance.heh-heh

Do continue!