Hey! Love the story. If you're not done revising and editing, could you show a few more scenes of Kent/Angela? I feel like I kind of "missed" their story. So, if possible...maybe?

Thanks!

This already sounds like a very interesting story! It's doesn't sound cliche, and I really like your writing style. It's very fresh :)

Wow. This story is amazing. I just read the whole thing in two days and all I can say is wow. I definately can see what everyone at SKOW raves about the story and its always highly recommended and the first suggested when someones looking for something to read.

I was going to say theres some typos, and missed words in sentences, but you're already aware of that (as evident from this chapter). If you're going to do a major rewrite (and from what I gather from this chapter is what your planning to do) I'd suggest just starting at the start, from the very begining chapter. That way theres no confusion (for you or the readers) over which bit happens where and which chapter needs to be updated, but hasn't been and all the rest. Also would mean that when you add in your small sub-plots that you wouldn't have to rewrite a chapter one million times, because it doesn't fit with the chapter before it.

Despite the fact that there are a fair few typos and missing words (were only human, it happens to all of us) the writing is still exceptional. Despite the grammer issues and the rest, the story still flows so well. The anrrative voice and the characterisation are excellent. The subtle hints as to the whole framing and style of the story (which is so unique) is fantastic and carry's the story really well. The ending is so creative and I loved it, although to my own disappointed I found myself more attached to Carly and Clark, than Parker and Livy (a weird thing to notice, when one considers themself to be the same people, just with different names). While there was a slight disappointment, I also found myself thourougly intrigued and relieved as well. Congrads on writing such a well-loved story. ANd well-rounded, nothing seemed mary-suish or too over the top.

Jess

Love, love it!

EXcept the whole changing of names was confusing...

but it was awesome!

LOL. 10 Things I Hate About You.

i know that this ending was meant to be different and you're avoiding the whole cliche thing, but i'm addicted to cliches. i guess u can call this a happy ending but the thing i don't get is how Carly and Clark can just move on like this; it seems like they've just moved on with no regrets, like their whole relationship, their feelings toward each other was nothing. how can Clark love Carly and then go with Sharon, and how could Sharon just accept him like that?

ohh, so many questions!

wonderful

Hello, nice story very entertaining and all, I just have one question to ask, She is a writer that does not like to read. hmm this makes me doubt her ability to write anything worth reading. What was your thought process when deciding to use that device?

I like it! it captured my attention and makes me want to keep reading! your very gifted with words. good job!

Oh man, this is the best story I've read on this site ever! It had a great plot,amazing character dynamics, and comedy that had be laughing at 2 in the morning. Really, REALLY great! I hope you continue writing, I really do. The only thing I have to complain about is the end of Liv's book, where Carly and Clark split. I literally had a heart attack. Then I read the last chapter and said myself, "So THATS what happend." Great job and you can definitly expect more reviews from me for your other stories!

All I can say is, "AW!" Seriously, I finished reading the last line and I clapped a hand to my chest just like the steriotypical sap that sits at home on a Saturday night reading fiction press. I absalutely LOVE how these characters are growing towards each other. GREAT job!

Great story! very nice...

good job!

Jaliy!

YAY! Fantastic story!

"Well," I snapped, "at least I didn't lie down and let my parents run right over me, like some dog that had just gotten fixed."

man that is the best line ever, i laughed so hard! this story is awesome!

love the movie references, the godfather thing was classic. I also like the full house one, it always seems that show portrays the perfect family don't you think?