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substitute angel 2007-07-24 ch 1,	I like this already. It's cute and Fiona is a character that's easy to relate to. I wonder where you're going with this, so I'll just read on. Keep up the great work. ::Tomorrow Becomes Yesterday::
PainKiller 2003-06-12 ch 14,	Sigh Me and my big mouth. But yes, I did think you'd do it. That's why I made the bet. ::Winks:: Hehe, the first thing I couldn't help but notice was how small of a chapter it was for you to write. I wonder why... It was very "cryptic" (thought I'd slip that in), adding the element of her father being a somewhat immature father (Gambling, drinking). Andrew's character keeps getting deeper. Great work, so glad you updated... OOg, I need to go write chapter ten. Love ya, Mary Helen!
CatieZee 2003-06-11 ch 14,	A h h h h h h h h h h h h h h h h ! ! ! ! Thank you so much for updating, hun. Ahem cough finally cough. It was great. You did an awesome job with her father and I'm really starting to like Andrew now. I CANNOT WAIT to read more. Seriously. ... Seriously. Love ya. Great chaper.
fool-of-a-took2 2003-06-11 ch 14,	I'm so glad you added another chapter! I don't have much time, so I'll just say that I loved the phrase, "His grin was as plastered as his hair." That is so cool!
keng2116 2003-06-05 ch 13,	don't quit it is great
PainKiller 2003-05-20 ch 12,	Eponine, eh? I know that name anywhere. It's Les Miserables, my favorite musical. Anyway, enough of the fluff. This was a really nice chapter. It made me smile after crying in the last chapter. I love the last line, "And I was alone". Gives it a wonderful touch. Great work, and I'm off to finish your story.
PainKiller 2003-05-20 ch 11,	I hate to admit it, but this chapter made me cry. So wonderfully done. I love the change between the italics and the normal font. It's quite well done. This is amazing writing. I'm afraid to read the rest!... but I want to! Keep it up!
PainKiller 2003-05-20 ch 10,	This is one of the longest chapters I've ever read! And I wished it was longer when I was finished with it! So, so engaging to read. Your descriptions are amazing. I feel like I'm there, because you give me these mental pictures. Truly fantastic. Great work, Mary Helen.
PainKiller 2003-05-20 ch 9,	Very, very sad, and excellently well done. The child's character is spectacular. A true masterpiece of a chapter. I hope all of them are this good... which the other ones have been. I love your writing tons! I hope you keep updating!
PainKiller 2003-05-20 ch 8,	The chapter was all funny until that last line, "No, Mommy, I had a mightmare". I was just thinking, "Oh no." I can't tell you how gripping this is, Mary Helen. Simply fantastic. I marvel at your skill.
PainKiller 2003-05-20 ch 7,	Wow, I certainly wasn't expecting this. It's really cryptic and mystical. I simply LOVE the way you portray the innocence of the child. This is growing so interesting, I can't stop reading it! Spectacular interlude!
PainKiller 2003-05-20 ch 6,	Aww. I really like Dr. Shastakovich. You've given him a wonderful background, and made the reader delight in hearing about him. Your exposition is fantastically done. You are such an awsome writer. I'm off to read more!
PainKiller 2003-05-20 ch 5,	Well, I think that after reading this chapter, you put some of yourself into Fiona (mostly because I pictured you giggling). I really like the way you make Andrew so mysterious (and pretty creepy). I really love this story, and can't get enough of it. Mary Helen, you are awsome!
PainKiller 2003-05-20 ch 4,	Good, solid chapter. A little less action than the previous ones, but I still loved it. I feel somewhat sad for Fiona, because she has so many responsibilites, but you portray her very true-to-life. I'm off to read the next chapter. Great work!
PainKiller 2003-05-18 ch 3,	I really enjoyed this chapter. I couldn't help but laugh when I noticed that you were able to slip "War And Peace" into your story... Really good chapter. I especially laughed when Fiona says, "You’re not funny,” I hissed. Wonderful story, and I look forward to reading the rest after exams.

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