fairly interesting author's note. do you really believe any other person here is so anal retentive as to care about how your view of fantasy differes from tolkiens or d&d? seems rather superfluous to add such a note. anyways, sorry about the rant. on to important business. grammatically at first not much, just recheck 'faithful' day i think you meant fateful. and personally i guess the part where you translate the chanting, is that really necessary to the progression of the story? still i will say i really liked this story and i'm glad that this one is one you plan on continuing. perhaps i'll go to check out your other works. well, continue soon.