aw they made up, thats so sweet. great story, in future please put * after an author's note.

Such a cute story! ^_^ I can't wait to read more. Keep up the great work!

This story is great. I love how you used your imagination with the surroundings, the happenings, and the people. Keep it up!
However, one thing you must think of is the present-past tense settings you use. I have done it myself, so don't feel bothered. But think of what way you want to write it(past or present) and keep to it!
Jessica

WOW! O.O I thought you had just...stopped updating.

very well done! **claps** It makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside! Where is my teddy bear? I must hug him! ^_^ te he. I loved it!

How rude of you! I was going to take a nice bubbly bath about 30 min. ago but I got sucked into this cute little story! HOW RUDE! You should really think about putting disclaimers on your story that say like "Warning: if you want to take a bubbly bath in the next few minutes do so now before reading because you will get sucked in!" How inconsiderate of you! For shame!

So far this is a charming story ^_^ I've had relationships with many boys like Yersin. ^_^ Very cute. You fall in love with the characters. Great job! ^_^

*sniffs, wipes away a tear* aw ;_; this is really awsome.

Poor Yersin, lol. This is terribly funny. I think you should have told us their ages by this point in the story though. I can't tell, but they act like ten year olds, lol.
Reading on...

""If it's such a baby thing, Ramira, then why were you talking to your Jamada only a week ago?" I taunted back" OOps, isn't his name Yersi, not Ramira? ;)

Okay, now I'm at 14. This is a great story so far. The chapter's could be longer, but they're good. I look forward to more.

Okay, so I'm here in chapter 11. I noticed that this chapter has absolutely no structure to it. It's all one paragraph. It's a great paragraph, but the structure is all wrong.

O_O POOR RAMIRA!!

aw... poor Ramira *Takes out flamethrower and torches boys who attacked her* Luv yer story!

That SON OF A ** OH hell no you better make sure she get's revenage on each and every boy that did that to her, Oh there is no way You can stop there hell no! I hope Yersin get's his ** kicked and I hope those loser died for what they did to her! other than that great story Keep it up! UPDATE SOON!