Lol so x.x i was testing out your story and .. He slapped her ! Lool interesting .. Very interesting

Whoa this story was amazing. I loved it so much; every time I finished reading one chapter I couldn't wait to get to the next

You mentioned have a website with other pieces posted on it. Is that still the case? I didn't see it linked in your profile anymore, but I'd love to read more of your work!

Good story, with a cliché plot. The characters seems inconsistent, they abruptly change personality depending on the scene. some parts seems rushed and some seems to be dragging. Please don't take my criticisms to heart. To be honest I could never hope to write as good as you. This has been a great read I had in a while. I could easily get lost in the scene and you describe Leah's emotion really well.

Its a good story, it has some plot issue and some major character flaws. It seemed rushed and lacked any real acton. But it was very good with a great plot. I really enjoyed reading did a great job!

He already told her he was looking for her...i think shehas reallly bad selective hearing.

I think its odd the way the reacted to him waking up, i mean he saved her life and told her he loved hr what more ould she want.

Is it bad that the end made me want to laugh? Thethought of her waving at the enemie was too much!

He just loves windows doesn't he? I really like this chapter

Jacque reminds me of zeveran from dragon age chapter was surprisingly cute.

Okay soo last time i checked she was an adult...so why does she have to go back to them?

The chapter was amazing. But there is a problem...her punched the wall that had to make some sort of sound. Why didn,t tullson come running sooner?

He vaguely reminds be of themain character from the movie man from a wonderfull movie a little graphic but still very good!

I was about say the story lacked action, but now it seems things are heating up. I reallly love the plot! Her parents sending a letter completely unexpected.

Heartbreakingly good!