please. i want to read more

I like how this story started. When I get home tonight, I may try to read and give further critique for there are some parts that do not seem to flow right when I read it.

Just remember this: it is also a matter of style. Whatever critique I give tonight will be nothing more than suggestions. What sounds right to you should be what matters. Every author is different. :)

I added this to favorites!

Interesting.
I think you should continue instead of leaving a cliff-hanger...I'm about to fall!
I like these kind of stories. and I thought it was expected tat he would kill the child!

awsome chpt. i would hate to meet a drow woman either she or i would die lol. i can't believe he killed the child and poor Riala all alone.

please update soon
i wish you luck on your writing!
A Dark Rose

PLEASE UPDATE! please please please

I hope you are continuing at least some of these stories!

Please keep going! They are so good!

This is pretty cool, and the plot is pretty captivating. Remember to read your work over, ALOUD, and don't be self contridicting (sp?). Other than that... UPDATE!

How come you wont update this story? I mean, its obviously your most reviewed story, except from the one you publish, i dunno about that.. this is really good..

awwessome chapter! wonder what's going to happen next?!

*Cries like a wimp* I absolutely adore your writing!

awesome story! i think this is one of your best. you should definitly work some more on this sometime soon!michelle

nice story ^-^

so.. are you gonna continue this fic? stupid question... it had been 2 years already since you made this fic... so that means you will not continue this story.. how sad... D':

Whoa... o.0 This. Is. So. COOL! How come this hasn't been up-dated in more than a year? It's amazing! I want to read more but I can't unless you up-date. Please? *Gives puppy dog face*

Could you write more from the Drow's point of view? It's really interesting, and I think you're pretty good at making differnt personalities.

Interesting chapter. I like getting a little bit into his mindset like that. Good work.

~icthus