Very niceI especially liked how u explained the pictures.It was kinda like the womans side of Greece lol ya know men killing and fighting to the deathand the women battling at there tapestrysNice short story it was kinda slow at start but matured towards the end.

wow! i really liked this! at times the narrative became a little to colloquial, but there was such a sense of a story being told verbally that it could be excused. and i loved the dialogue - it was so fun! it was reminiscent, i thought, of perhaps sailor moon. i enjoyed your poking fun at zeus' permiscuousness, and i also noted your use of the word "stola" and other knoweldge of greek/roman relics of the time. and your explaination of hippolyte cracked me up! is there going to be any more?

Wow!! u are such an amazingly talented writer. The humor was all perfectly blended witht he artful writing and descriptions, nothing seemed out of place! Cheers!

Amusing in its modern meets ancient sort of way. I laughed out loud at the meaning of the names. You've got real comedic talent.

Oh, you write *beautifully*!!
Kudos to you for finishing the entire story in one chapter! My Muse knows I could never do that with a myth like this--any version of mine would stretch on across mountains of words. Your work's short, but still conveys a great sense of character and gets the essential plot across very well. Wonderful work! I'm off to read some of your other stuff!
--Museworks

wow, this was great. i should read more stuff on fictionpress if any of its like yours.

This is great. Well written.

OMG this is a very good story but it is really sad, i mean how could athena be so mean, poor archne! **sniff, sniff**

*gasp* How could Athena be so mean?! I love the description of the tapestries- though the language changed from the proglogue/prelude and the real story. It was a bit more comical in the story itself. *shakes head* I'm still trying to digest Athena being mean...

the beginning few paragraphs were very powerful, though you did lose some of that power later on, it was still good. Greek Mythology is one of my favorite writing subjects. thank you for a new spin on old characters!

very nice Jexia, I like the metephore and simile of the first few paragraphs, those were very strong. Its an interesting tale, my greek mythology is a little rusty, but I really enjoyed the piece. I think you loose a little power when you come to the dialouge in this peice, but I think its hard to come off those first few paragraphs that are so strong (dont worry I am having hte same problem in something I am working on as well, the start is so strong you just cant sustain that pace forever) Over all two thumbs up, kudos :D

hm... this story seems familiar. ah! i remember now! but there's more attitude in the characters! that's cool! bye!

I thought this began very well, but after that, when the characters emerged, the story became childish due to the lack of depth in their personality. I must admit, I like Athena too much to ever think Arachne won, but still, this was a worthwhile read.

Hi Jexia,

I like the greek mythology very much,
an your story is very good (my English not, please excuse me).

Hope you write soon again,

Disminuya

very good! you have a lot of potential to be a great writer!