Hi, its E.J.A Roberts. Thank you for reviewing, you are my first one! I thank you for being honest, that means alot to me. Also, the people I wrote about in that chapter, aren't the main charaters. They are basically the ones responsible for everything that's messed up in the main charaters lives. I believe that you get changed when you recieve christ as your savior as well. Its nice to know I'm not the only one. Also, my story is christian themed, I know that the prologue dosen't make it seem that way,and i guess the same could be said for the firts chapter as well. However, I did that for a reason. In order for people to get what I'm trying to say, that god can reach and urn the life around of Anyone in this world, you need to understand just how 'tainted' they are. I can't wait to read more your works, and I hope you keep reading mine work. It helps to have someone honest reviewing.

Hi, this sounds very good. I can't wait to read the rest.

Wow!! this is awesome! You should really try getting this published! You'd be rich! lol!

HI, I haven't completed reading the first part of your story yet but so far it is really amazing. Fantasy is my least favourite genre and I decided to try it out and yours was the first I came across, and I am so glad I picked yours. You are a fabulous writer and I see you have the second part out already so I better get reading. If you get enough time, check out my story, India, you may not enjoy it because it isn't fantasy but I would really appreciate it.
Mimi x

Wow! I've been trying to figure out a way to include God in a story of the genre I enjoy writing, and you've really inspired me that it can be done. You have an amazing vision. It's like you're telling an important message without sounding preachy. Wonderful job.
If I were to make an "constructive comments" the only think I'd say is to lessen the amount of exclamation points in the narrative. But, that's just my style, and this your work.
Again, wonderful job! I'll have to come back for more soon...
-God bless-

I am an 11 year old girl who loves to read and write and whose cat is cuddling up to her right now. lol. I haven't read this chapter yet but only went over the chapter titles. You've used 'The' so many times. There are some places where you can take it out and you should think about that. 'Stories are art but the title helps all.' (Just a saying I made up.) Sry, constructive critim from an 11 year old. This chapter seems really short, but i'm gonna read it and review for it and chapter 2 on chapter 2 review.
~Devin

That was a really good ending. Will you be starting on "The Spire" right away? If you ever get these books published on mass, I will definitely look out for them in stores! I mean, I know I've already read the first one but there are some books which you can read over and over without getting bored of them.
Thanks for being an inspiration and I hope to see some chapters from "The Spire" soon.

I really think you have a great shot at getting this published! And I'm really looking forward to reading the next book!!

The story's almost over, I'll have to check out the other one's your writing. All well can't wait for the next chapter!!

I adore this! You are a very talented writer; your work really is amazing. Keep up all the great work, and I look forward to reading more! *Ladylore*

Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one!!

All together now, collective sigh, "aw"

I like the ending of this chapter, it makes you wonder if their just taking a long time, or if something happend to Dorfen. Or even if Dorfen changed his mind about helping. I can't wait for the next chapter!!

Hey great chapters! I love the way the story lines going!! Can't wait for the next one!

Wow, that was quick! I only sent the last review less than an hour ago!