not so much
the lover

This sentence: "The broken shards shot through her body, maiming her motions and emotions."
Wonderfully wrought.

Others that struck me were "showing each other their other masks," and "admiring each others manipulations."

How pleased it makes me feel to be shown that irony can be beautiful.

You mentioned in the author’s notes that the allegory was a bit repetitive. I disagree, but I think that it tends to break down when you start writing about the other dancers, i.e. "others…giddy with the spring morning," and "more benign and wholesome, sweet for their parents." I find it hard to comment on a specific aspect of these lines, but I just feel the writing isn’t as strong when it becomes less personal.

Overall, I admired the subtlety of the poetry. Your use of alliteration and interior rhyme leaves an unsettling subject a smooth feeling. The whole piece reverberates with a very personal feeling that leaves little echoes I can’t quite shake.

wow that was... amazing

I liked this. Especially the last line.

And you're allegoricalness fit just right. Prince running off and grabbing someone else's glass slipper. Very good.

That was great, loved the allegory, it wasn't too repetitive, it was touching.

Your mask sounds better than my mask, people always see through my mask.

that was really well written

hmm i like it. reminds me of how i feel sometimes.