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| PainKiller 2003-06-28 ch 1, | abuseA very original concept, which you flushed out well. Good clastic wording. One note. Just a personal preference, but I usually put a few lines in between my actual work and my author's notes. |
| Trapped-Bird 2003-06-06 ch 1, | abuseI loved it. Genius how you took a normal childish game, and turned it into a "War" |
| Karbini27 2003-06-02 ch 1, | abuse~_~there's like, no gap between your A/N and the last paragraph."still shooting foam darts of death"-sounds like your brother lol. Coolness. And you finally got your review! |