Wow.
I'm impressed! This story is just...wow!! I love it!
I love how Renaud treats everything with haughty indifference. Will got served near the end of this chapter when R said
"Self-control is a virtue. I suggest you learn it. Sportsmanship is also held in the highest esteem."
That was amazing. Bravo to Renaud! :D

Of course, there are a few minor spelling/punctuation errors here and there, but they don't really matter.
I do, however, find it odd that Alex said the word "coolest" like he did, since, the last time I checked, that word wasn't used like that in those times. Hehe, oh well.

The third chapter awaits, and I'm excited!

Wow! This is a wonderfully intriguing story. Your descriptive paragraphs aren't wonderful, but you excel at characterization - this is some of the best I've seen on this site. Your attention to historical detail is also admirable. My soul criticism is that occasionally one of your lines reads in a somewhat awkward manner, however such lines are thinly scattered and are of no significant consequence.

wait, did you write that or was that the song? Well if you did thats really really good, if it's the song... good song

I liked the story

kt this is good

wutever happened to Alex and Constance? they obviously didn't die...

WILL U EVA MAKE A STORY WHERE THE MAIN CHARACTERS DON'T DIE? probably not. o well, ive gotta stop getting addicted 2 ur stories. the endings are so sad! no fair!

good story. i can c y Mr. W gave u an A+

KATIE! your awsome the french guy is so kool... so is Will's sis

Katie, redo the ending lol

Looks like Constance got a job as the cook. Men just can't take care of themselves, can they? Very amusing. Couldn't stop grinning. Love the way every soldier's trying to catch her eye. Convenience or true love?

It's all been very lighthearted. We've had a glimpse of action from Renaud. Expecting more it. There's something tense about to happen. Lightness like this can't last for long...

The American Continental Army never struck me as being very brave... their use of guerilla tactics was most effective though. Might just be my memory, but weasn't about this time the Americans started running out of powered and bullets?

Very effective use of the dates. Casts the whole thing into persective. Makes me feel less guilty about reading this instead of writing my History essay.

I love the briskness of your dialogue, but there a moments when modern slang starts creeping in. Not particularily annoying, but it pulls me out of the period. These are after all 18th Century teens arguing, not modern. Maybe some period slang?

Adorable shooting lesson. The instructions were most accurate. And Will's protective brother side coming into play makes the whole thing very amusing. A brilliant romp though the battlefields of time. I see that the title's going to be a running joke. Bloody brilliant.

May your tale spin smooth and long, unmatted by frustration.

Curiously, I distinctly remember that at large majority of Washington's army were freed slaves at this point.

Again the point with the Brown Bess not being regulation weaponry.

Love the "male bonding" moments. Very amusing. Seeing grown men skip is always slightly disturbing, though, despite being very high on the amusement factory.

Strangely enough, the war doesn't feel very "real" right now. Despite all the mentions of arms and the previous casualties, it still feels very distant and Will's still having the time of his life. Wonder if that'll change.

Will's motivation for joining the war is a little unclear. I remember the his father's fury at the so-called "unjust" taxes of British rule (The average Brit pays over 25shillings, 50times more than the average American. All the taxes they proposed were already part of the British system). He's not exactly sprouting "Give me liberty or give me death!" I personally admire this moderation. I find it hard to relate to radicals and fanatics. And most admirable you didn't give him a sob-story background. Will's just your normal guy joining up for the war. Less than two chapters and a song into the story and I'm enamoured.

Renaud is very interesting... his rant on war... I love the way you give the war another view. A timely reminder of it's horrors.

Bit disturbing that Constance can find them so easily. Glad you're bringing another of those AWoI things into play. The "feminine touch." All the eye-rolling, arms-folding and death-glares. She's adorable, especially the way she fusses over Will. A very timeless moment of: "Men can't do this stuff without a woman, can they?"

Love your cast of characters: Will. Constance. The dreaded Frenchman, Renaud. Alex. The banter keeps the story very much alive. Very clever banter. Love the way the title echoes again. Most amusing.

May your words weave well, unknotted and untangled.

I love your beginning. Slight reminiscent of a well written history book with the snippet of dialogue from Will's mother, yet full of the emotion.

History: The Brown Bess was the regulation musket for the British, the Americans on the other hand used the superior weapon of the light and accurate Pennsylvania flintlock, developed by the German settlers.

Like the detail of Alex resigning, since most soliders only signed up for a year and left.

I like the detail of the campsite, really brings the period alive.

English vs French hatred goes back a long, long, long way... beyond the Seven Years War, actually, right back to Henry XVI and beyond... There are many religious reasons involved too.

Like the way the title's coming into play... Stupid Englishman. Bloody Frenchman. Couldn't help but grin. I'm surprised though, wouldn't Will be insulted when called an Englishman, since after all they are fighting the British at that point.

Interesting that you don't put an accent for the French, merely mentioning instead. Thank you, a lot easier on the eyes...

Love the irony of it all, since the whole French army (and navy) will be coming over to fight for them.

Intrigued. Very much intrigued. The diaglogue's snappy and amusing, but you take your time with historical details. Great romp in history... wonder if the British are going to make their debut in this war? And the good old Hessians?

May the words flow spill forth from your soaring imagination.