ah!! IT'S AWESOME! I love what you've done with the characters in just two chapters! I wasn't confusing at all and i just loved all of the variety with your characters. In just those two chapters I really got connected with the characters and even the situation they were going through. Definitely write more regardless of when you last worked on it! It's great!:D If you could R&R what i've got so far i'd love it because i can tell you're a great writer and would probably have some good advice! :D thanx!

Nice to see some good stuff in the Western section.

Wow... fabulous characters! It's my personal and humble opinion that you should continue this story, despite the fact that you wrote it in '03, because I like it and it's the only story you have with more than one chapter. Also I wanna find out what happened to Alric.

Fantastic work. Added you to my favorite others. I like the dialogue, though like many others, I'm a little overwhelmed by all the characters at first.

I like what's here so far. The names and characters are a little confusing right now, but that's only because I haven't read enough to get to know them. I'd like to though. Please write more.
DRE & LLS

A well-written opening chapter, though I did feel a litle overwhelmed by the number of characters that were thrown at me in such a short amount of time. It might help to cut some of the ancillary characters and actions from this portion and introduce those guys/gals when they begin to affect the story.

Youve done it again!! I LOVE your stories. Put you on my authors and story list. I have a story called KID on this thread. Id be interested in your opinion.First effort,be cruel if you must.
Thanx
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Ah...!! I love Alric!! ^_^ Wicked story.. Reminds me of "Fortunes Journey" by Bruce Coville. :) Please do email me when you update?

Hey, this is really good! I'm definitely impressed.

Continue!

Sierra :)

This is good so far. Keep up the good work and continue please.

Great starting to a great story!

Easy-going intro to an interesting cast. I like your style! It's simple, casual and very welcoming. I would love to see the rest of the story write itself out. Go!

Well, you already know I love this so far, but I'll tell you again: I love this so far. I can't wait til you write more. ^^