this is so so beautiful. i love the repitition of

(I am watching a man who is eight

years older than myself...)

it really makes the piece flow.

amazing

I love your poetry. I know I have not read or reviewed it in a long while but I just get so captivated by it. I think the thing I like most is that it is cryptic (dream like!) and seems to speak to the individual rather then the crowd. Does that make any sense, lol.

OK, ok... the bottom line is... I LOVE IT.

Jade

ah. beautiful, of course.

(sorry don't have time in pain homework squeezing my brain like a C-clamp)

am proud - actually know who these are _

EG

*dies* the first lines...gah...all the lines...ah

I was intrigued first by your author name, then by your poem. It is shockingly beautiful, and I think quite insightful as well. However, I think you should be more clear about the speaker's intentions in this poem.