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The Lark Ascending 2005-01-01 . chapter 1
Interesting view into human psychology. . . clutter really can lead to depression, after all. I wonder, though, whether your use of "the mother" and "the daughter" could be alternated more often with "her mother," etc. It develops a more personal relationship between the reader and your characters, in my experience. Anyway I found your story original and refreshing - good job.
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