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| The baava Project 2005-07-18 ch 1,  | abuseO_O Whoa. That was way dark - what the heck? Talk about suspenseful. I can see that this is an older piece as well, so I'll only leave you with my thoughts. I actually liked this, twisted as it is, you sadist. (kidding ^_~) First, I love the name Fiamma - I've never heard anything quite like it! And second, after first learning that she's a fire elemental and then that she's trying to get help for her village - how neat! A village is such a human concept (and I couldn't help wondering if she bathes). But twisted, ironic ending. Very tense, intriguing, and made me go, NO! hehe. Later!LoK |
| Sharakinpaix 2005-07-11 ch 1, | abuseGripping exposition! Are you going to continue with this concept? I loved how her thoughts flowed in the last paragraph... I also speak French, so way to add Latin into her name! *looks it over* Nothing less than perfect! |
| Arrow's Flight 2005-05-23 ch 1, | abuseThis is really sad. The story was really intriguing, and I'd love to read more like this. The imagery was excellent, and it gives life to the idea that sometimes love doesn't always triumph. KEEP WRITING! -Arrow's FLight- |
| Aceandcups 2005-02-04 ch 1, | abuseI know that struggle and angst are apart of this story, but the tone doesn't really captivate me. I like the fact that Fiamma doesn't speak, because that would mean her story would be personal. Instead we find a heroine and a struggle; very believable. |
| spazticpoetgrl 2003-08-14 ch 1, | abuseahh thats so sad, but a little bit like life, u make it through obstacel onyl to run into another. another great story. keep writin -Spaz |
| SQ (finally returning a rev... 2003-07-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseBummer... a shorty, and a nasty! Very nicely written, though :) |
| Matthew 2003-03-18 ch 1, anon. | abuseWhat a bummer...running so long, only to end up where you started, and to see everything suddenly gone. Good story though, very ironic. Question: How can a fire elemental have the wind knocked out of themselves? Keep writing =) |