  ani-chan 2003-04-25 . chapter 2 sowies miss orbz i didn't review earlier but i was busy so yeah its good i love it... keep up the great work... peace out, ani-chan... |
| Ann Banan 2003-04-20 . chapter 2 hey good chapter bro! keep it up ... update again kk ... ITS REALLY GOOD miss ya ! |
| Heather 2003-04-15 . chapter 1 It's extremly good and detailed, alls it needs is the ending:) |
| *kAnDii* 2003-04-13 . chapter 1 its really gwd.. uv got an imaginative mind.. formal yet u use so much colloquial speech in 1 particular paragraph.. hehe
dis iz going well.. keep up da updatez.. =) |
| fiery 2003-04-04 . chapter 1 this is really good update soon plz |
  Silken Silver Berries 2003-03-18 . chapter 1hey, this is good, please update this soon! |
| +~[G]enEraL ToPoLo[V]+~ 2003-03-17 . chapter 1 umm ... too much on the adverbs ... the story-line is kewlz.
You just need to try to lower the use of adjectives and use more oxymorons ... KK? ... |
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