I think you have an interesting story so far, but as you mentioned in the intro explaining the rush of the first chapter... i still think you have rushed through out... I think it would be better, and probably what the publishers look for, being more intricate with the characters or the plot... it's a good plot, just need for intricacy with the characters

You used the N... word! I wont hold it aganist you, this time!

FANTASTIC JOB

I like the plot very much. But it really needs alot of work. I know you wrote it along time ago, but you should consider rewriting it cos it has potential.
Some probles with it are:
scenes are way too short, hence your pacing is stuffed. It seems like you "run" away early from the scenes and leave them at a minimum.
Everything happens too fast. First Marietta gets a job, the next thing you know she's getting married to Drew. There was absolutely no warning of this, and no scenes with the two of them that suggest an impeding proposal.Everything i have read so far (Marietta has left Drew and returned to Atlanta) is moving too fast. You don't give me enough time to get into a scene at all.
Coincidences never work in creative fiction ... Michael living in texas and then Marietta moving there because Drew has a job in the exact same town is way too much of a coincidence.

This is going to be a sad one isnt it? Your writing is realy good.Ill get back to this one as soon as I can. Just read the first chapter and its GREAT
DYLAN

I think this story is amazing. You are an exellent writter! I can't wait for part three to come out. I think you shout keep it all in the same, have part three follow part two.

I cast my vote for seperate. It's been an enjoyable story so far. I'll be looking forward for the third part.

PEL

Hmm. I say seperate. That seems like a good ending to me. *pause* There's more? *does a happy dance*

That was a great chapter! I can't wait to read more from you. Despite my earlier suggestion I think that since you have the first 2 parts together, you should keep the third one in the same story too. Again, wonderful job. :)

This was an incredible story! A little jumpy occasionally, but still awesome. I sat up reading this story until 3:00 in the morning. You know it's a good book when you do that! Michael Bandit is an AWESOME guy! And I understand about seeing it as a movie, same thing happens to me. So... yes, absolutely awesome story!

Separate...

What a great ending. So nice to see the family happy, but with some loose ends left to set up the next story.

Wonderful writing, a great grasp of the characters. I'll be waiting for more.

I LOVE IT! My Cousin was crying (Don't ask me why)

~Rose~

i love your story! i've been following it for over a month now. it's GREAT =). historically correct or not :). i can't wait-for the rest of part 2 and part 3!! keep up the awesome work =D!

Well, Drew hitting Marietta and her filing for divorce was a bit abrupt . . . and kinda random.

o.O; Wow . . . this is amazing.