From the Neopets review circle. This is a nice story! Very well-written, very deep.

Very good story, a very intersting idea. I just have one piece of constructive criticism: too many sentences start with the same word. Put in just a little more variety.
(I know what you mean when you say you just had to get it out of your system.)

Not bad. Not bad at all. I had a few quibbles-some of the sentences were choppy, there were typos here and there, but that can be remedied with a little editing. On a different note: From one Sci-Fi writer to another, credit chits and hyper drives are more than a little bit cliche. Think of something original...like Altarian dollars and a Galactica drive. Or something more plausible. Anyway, good job. Keep it up.

Again, I like... interesting piece. You could expand on it-- it's got potential.

Awseome that was cool. Maybe you could write some more about Alania. Or Xalera. Or whatever.

that was ncie, but sad! it had such a quick ending! i would have liked for it to go on a little bit. that bounty hunter killer guy is suck a jerk. hmph.

Nice. It's very interesting. Write more! ^_^

xalera doesnt sound like a very good bounty hunter to just rush in like that

also, good work with the fortune teller =)